TwitterGroup Treatment - Third Draft Version 2
Explanation for changes: The majority of the plot, context and themes of the story is very much still present, however the rock being the special object in possession of James, is replace by a batch of sweets, as well as the origins of the special object being given more plausbility and realism in terms of the object's popularity amongst those from James' age group or an age group slightly, so in other words, teenagers and children are more likely to be seen with sweets than a rock that is one of many rocks in different shapes and sizes, mainly due to use.
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Feedback: Issues
- Gaining access to the stretcher would be a problem, because the P.E. Department requires for health and safety reasons
- Communicating to the audience how the boy comes up with the idea of robbing a bank.
Feedback: Solutions
- Special word for bringing people out of time suspension could be written on the packet: with the boy looking at it as he enters a desperate state when trying to unfreeze everyone for the first time
- A wheelchair can be used instead of stretcher, as the former is more accessible than latter and would come with that humorous sentiment.
- Ensure that the number of locations included in the story is feasible: ideally 2 locations will do with the resources at disposal.
- Conduct some research on cracking open a safe.
- Narrative Development - Pranks need to grow in difficulty, as the story progresses.